Sunday, December 23, 2007

"टूटने का दर्द "

ये प्राची की लाली तब भी थी
सांझ गुलाबी तब भी थी,
जब आदम था ,जब कुन्ती थी ,
जब मज़नू था ,जब मीरा थी ,
सपने कभी न साजाओ इनके भरोसे
टूटने का दर्द ये नही समझते॥

15 comments:

परमजीत सिहँ बाली said...

अपने मन के एहसास को अच्छा ब्यां किया है।

आशीष "अंशुमाली" said...

भरोसे सज गये लाखों... निभा जिसमें थे तुम खुद... मौजूद

pragati haldar said...

Raam jee aapki rachnayen bhale hi chaar panktiyon ki ho,
har pankti apne aap mein ek mahakavya hoti hai..kam se kum mujhe to bahut kuch likhne ko prerit karti hai..

Keerti Vaidya said...

very nice

रंजू भाटिया said...

बहुत खूब ,,,,,कम लफ्जों में ज्यादा बात :)

surabhi said...

bahut khubshurat rachana hai
maano dard ko shabd mil gaye

Divya Prakash said...

mismatch hai kavita ke context aur uske conclusion main,esa mujhe lagta hai,meera ko dard nahi pata?kunti ko nahi pata ?majnu jitna tersa utna dard kahan koi jhel sakta hai? Inke bharose to aur sapne sajane chahiye !!
esa mujhe laga iss liye likh raha hun ,plz don;t take it otherwise.
regards
Diva Prakash

रामकृष्ण गौतम said...

shaandar hai yaarrrrrrrrrrrrr

Dr. sunita yadav said...

gagar men sagar?sapne kabhi mat sajaao...tuutne ka dard ye nahi samajhte

shaveta said...

bahut ahce..
sapne jo tute ha une sajana sach me ha mushkil bahut hi acha ahsas ha

Ajeet Shrivastava said...

Salah-e-nazm do unko jinhen bikharne ka dar hai
sapne dekhne se pahle unke tutne ka dar hai
ham to shakhse-aam hain jo sapnon mein jite hain
jakhm-e-behisab mein yahan kisko dard ka dar hai

vasundhara said...
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संत शर्मा said...

Nice expression

Advocate Rashmi saurana said...

ek se badhakar ek rachanaye. jari rhe.

gyaneshwaari singh said...

bahut badi baat kah gaye ant mein aap
...kam shabdo mein bahut kuch ....

sakhi